The lost Puppy

Authors Note: This creative story was written to show improvement in sentence fluency.    



  One day in a cold house there was a puppy alone for two hours. A gust of wind blew open the door and the puppy ran out. Without thinking, the puppy went the wrong way when he thought he was going home. Then the puppy got to a house that looked like his home, but it wasn't his home. Next, the puppy's owners realized that he was gone.

     The next day the puppy ran away from this house and tried to run back in the direction he came. He ran  the wrong way again! Eventually, the owners sent out a search party for there cute little puppy, but the search party did not find the dog. When the search party was about to give up they found the puppy just outside of the neighbor hood.

     Since the puppy was home his owners were very happy. During the night the house was broken into and the puppy was kidnapped. Five hours after it happened, none of the puppy's owners knew he was missing. With the family so sad and angry, they called the police to tell them as much as they could.

     Searching everywhere, the police chief and his men did as much as they could to track down the thief. Sadly, nothing worked. As soon as they were going to give up, they saw the puppy they were looking for. However, the puppy got hurt. After he was fully healed, the owners of this dog were happy to see him. Finally, the puppy saw his owners. He ran towards them and they were both very excited to see eachother.

Ms. Carvers point of view

Author's Note: This piece is a part of a book called the The Great Shark Mystery.  I have re-written the scene in Ms. Carvers point of view. 

I gathered some of my workers to an important meeting.

I started off by saying "We need more people to come to our park so we can fix the tanks and do not go out of business or sell the park. Any ideas?"

Mr.Wilson says "How about we hand out fliers about the animals in the park?"

I said "No because we already have it on every newspaper all over the world."

Next one of the workers told everyone there "How about a ride about the great white shark."

"No." I told him.

"But it is a great idea." One of the workers said.

Then the boxcar children sat down outside of my office.

Finally I yelled "The one answer to afford the ride is to get more money some how."

"Sorry I yelled I just don't want to hear any ideas that we can't afford." I said.

Then I left my office and saw the kids were there sitting outside my office.

"Did you hear anything?" I said.

"Yes." The boxcar children told Ms. Carver.

"How rude. They ease dropped on a important meeting. That's nosey." I thought.